Child psychologist, Stacy Carmichael (right) gives her autistic son Jayden, 8, a kiss as they "snuggle" on Jaden's bed on Thursday afternoon March 28, 2008. Carmichael, who specializes in children with disabilities, says of her work, "its very rewarding...people come in with questions and they want answers, and I can do that."
Tuesday, April 29, 2008
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Child psychologist, Stacy Carmichael (right) gives her autistic son Jayden, 8, a kiss as they "snuggle" on Jaden's bed on Thursday afternoon March 28, 2008. Carmichael, who specializes in children with disabilities, says of her work, "its very rewarding...people come in with questions and they want answers, and I can do that."
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I really like this image. Nice work.
Watch your commas. You wrote "Child psychologist, Stacy Carmichael (right) gives her..." Nix that comma. You don't need it. If you wanted to separate her name out as a separate clause, you could place a second comma after her name. However, I think that would be awkward. I'd go with no commas. "Child psychologist" simply describes Stacy Carmichael.
You also wrote "her autistic son Jayden, 8, ..." Here, you should probably have a comma after son. This separates out "Jayden, 8," as a separate clause. This is natural here, as you could remove his name and the sentence would read fine without it. You should also include Jayden's family name. We shouldn't assume it's the same.
You wrote: "Carmichael, who specializes in children with disabilities, says of her work, "its very rewarding...people come in with questions and they want answers, and I can do that."
This is fine. But you really like to lead into someone's quote with a sentence of your own. It's fine here, fine elsewhere, but you probably shouldn't do it too often. It's closer to AP style and generally cleaner just to let a person say his/her quote and follow it with "Joe Smith said." If you feel like their quote won't stand up without context, place a sentence before it to put it in context.
Here's a potential rewrite:
Carmichael, who specializes in children with disabilities, says that she enjoys her work. "It's very rewarding." Carmichael said. "People come in with questions and they want answers, and I can do that."
This solves the clunkiness of putting "..." in the middle of the quote. Also note: "it's," not "its." You can also use that first sentence to add more context from your discussion with her - i wasn't there, so I can't do that for you.
Love the image! Nice moment, nice relationship, good work.
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